Isolation
I was standing in a lonely house on top of a rock next to the sea. It felt really peaceful and quiet over here and the best thing about living here was that. The ocean was smooth and the air smelled fresh. I could see fish swimming in the ocean. I had to have a swim. Splash, in I went. The ocean was so pretty. It had coral and was clear. It was very unusual. As I got out of the ocean I quickly went to get my fishing rod so the fish wouldn't swim away before I got back. As I went fishing I caught a great big fish. I was so happy I went inside and got a book out and started reading about pirates. It was such a good book.
Kia ora Kylah. I really enjoyed reading your short story inspired by the word isolation. You chose descriptive words which helped me, the reader, imagine being there. Well done! I popped in and edited a few things for you, using the pencil. You can do this also, once you have published. Remember to read your story outloud to yourself before you publish. That way you can check if you need to add in anything or take out an extra word. Keep on blogging your 'at home learning'.
ReplyDeleteI love this photo Kylah, the first thing I thought of was 'how did they get to the island, and if it was by boat then where do they keep it?".
ReplyDeleteIt certainly looks peaceful and a great place to swim and fish! I like your use of onomatopoeia with the word 'splash'. Here are some other words that I think sound like what they are....vroom, achoo, pow and ding-dong. I wonder how many other fun ones you can think of?
Your photo perfectly matches the title of your story. I can imagine how peaceful and connected one would be to the nature. Such a serene feeling. Your writing has some good imagination Kylah.
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